06-01-2013, 07:59 AM
Hi rowens,
I often have difficulty with keeping interest in long poems, but this poem really caught me right from the start. It's a very interesting idea you have (and very different), and I think it's strong in execution. I also like it, because I could relate to a lot of it, and that really drew me into the poem: "All this stopping and starting..", "Through searching you, / I'm searching myself.", "do you care about me /or is it that you're just getting paid to care? /I care about you. // Is that wrong of me?" just to name a few lines that really grabbed my attention in a personal way. Thanks for the read, I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Best,
LB
I often have difficulty with keeping interest in long poems, but this poem really caught me right from the start. It's a very interesting idea you have (and very different), and I think it's strong in execution. I also like it, because I could relate to a lot of it, and that really drew me into the poem: "All this stopping and starting..", "Through searching you, / I'm searching myself.", "do you care about me /or is it that you're just getting paid to care? /I care about you. // Is that wrong of me?" just to name a few lines that really grabbed my attention in a personal way. Thanks for the read, I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Best,
LB