Bad Boys Club

[billy]

have a look at line end commas, many of them could go.

good edit.

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Behind the anonymity of the Avatar
bad boys bicker and banter
their lofty judgements.
They strap on silver spurs.
They never sleep, would 'and' work better than a 2nd 'they'?
crowing and clawing,
in cockfights of ego.
Masks are knocked askew.
Hints are dropped.
Who is Who,
and Who said
What?
Where is the Sage
who speaks few words,
yet shares his is 'his' needed?
Infinite Wisdom?
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Behind the anonymity of the Avatar
bad boys bicker.
They strap on silver spurs.
Never sleeping, crowing and clawing,
at this cockfight of egos.
Masks wear thin
as hints are dropped.
Who is Who and
Who said What?
Where is the Sage
who speaks few words,
yet shares His
Infinite Wisdom?

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Bad Boys Club

Behind the anonymity of the Avatar
bad boys bicker,
bantering lofty judgements about.
They strap on silver spurs
never sleeping,
crowing
and clawing,
at this cockfight
of egos.
Masks wear thin
as hints are dropped,
Who is Who,
and Who said
What?
Where is the Sage
who speaks few words,
yet shares
Infinite Wisdom
with the huddled masses?