Autumn

[tectak]

Hello,
Welcome.I come late to this and note that most points have been covered deeply! You have had quite a bogof with your commas but as another points out, though technically advantageous to your intent, they would be superfluous in any spoken delivery with syntax helping rather than hindering. Enough has been said on this subject already. A line by line may help us both!

Behold, green to brown and green to gold! though undeniably what you say is what is on the tin, you could say it in a more imaginative way...if only to avoid the repeat of the "g to b and g to g " mantra. "Behold", thankfully without the almost evangalistical exclamation mark, is a little biblical. The line is yours but " Look smilingly on green to gold, with autumn avarice" is mine from twenty years ago. I think the cry of cliche went up back then
soon, exposed, the stubble fields, An exclamation mark requires a capital letter in the next sentence. Line starts do not, of their own, require capitals. It is a school-day preference long outmoded. I note that "stubble field" gained you a point in another crit. You and I, though, both know that this is far from a clever use of words as any countryman knows that a stubble field is a stubble field. That is what it is called. I deny you the kudos but would not call cliche.
Leaves, underfoot, compress and mould, suspect syntax on "mould" as a verb. It is a noun and so you would be better writing " Leaves underfoot succumb to mould". Your poem.
Autumn asserts, as summer yields. Nice, crisp line. Worthy. More like this, please

Branches heavy with fruit galore, Shot dead and killed to death.
Nuts to hasten the squirrel’s task, Now you are being too hasty yourself. Image-wise this is not going to work because I can see that you are setting up a forced rhyme. The worst of it is your determination...and that is a good word. Furthermore, you are over-excited and have begun sticking exclamation marks on to mundane statements. More control needed here or we shall all be upstanding for a harvest festival hymn. You are also, in the same euphoria, failing to link lines by anything except your own joy. Unless the gestapo have commandeered the orchard, I would prefer that you stop ordering me about.
Garner them for the winter store!
Press apples for the cider cask!

Creatures, prepare for frost and snow, Read your work out loud. Now tell me why you put a comma after "Creatures". You cannot. It should not be there.
For days so short and nights so long, Change "for" to "when" then "are short" ,"are long" Not ideal but think on it.
Soon, flocks of birds migrating go, Maybe comma, but better not. The inversion is not helpful but you got your rhyme with snow. It nearly works.
Hail winter with their silent song. Again, the lack of linkage makes syntax strangely dictatorial. Hail! Winter.

So let’s wrap up and take a stroll,
Kick up the leaves along our way,
Let fall and winter take their toll,
March onward to the buds of May! Precipitous and thankfull ending. Says nothing consequential, lurches into cliche, and generally leaves me wanting closure. I suppose that overall it is light and frothy and true to genre. Sad about the demise of Reader's Digest. They would have paid you for this.

You did the best with nothing. As a start-up piece it knocks my first into unrecalled oblivion...but that was my choice. I didn't subject it to critique. Think on but do not stop writing...except when reading...and that would help.
Best,
tectak

Tectak,

Thanks for your detailed comments - duly noted, as and when they are constructive [[and helpful.

BTW, I believe that the comma in "Creatures, prepare for frost and snow," is perfectly ok - I am addressing all creatures in poetic rhetoric.

I can ask for no more, and perhaps, nor should you.
Best,
tectak