05-30-2013, 02:22 AM
I enjoyed the imagery of this piece. I love sunsets! You captured it. The first and third stanzas bogged it down a bit for me. Is it good manners here just to chop? Sorry if not! I thought your breaks were right on. 
Wait..
For that magical moment
When day meets night
And the sun romances the moon.
Crimson amber in flirtatious streaks
Blush in anticipation, << Blushing in anticipation.
Dallying,
in Sweet persuasion
ever,
ever so slow.
Seducing the vast horizon
Her shrouded mantle spreads demurely,
Resisting his persistent display.
Acquiescing surrender,
In vain, a gentle truce is met-
“Madam, Till we meet again..”
Relinquishing the day.
Melting embers sink in,
Doused completely,
Dives deep, into the watery ravine. <
Peeking from her hooded cloak,
The moon smiles, boldly charmed.
Unrobed by flattery, strips in glittering delight,
and takes the night full reign.
With a sudden start,
I realized
I stayed up much too late
I’ve caught them At
their rendezvous, " en flagrante"
Worth all the wait!
Wait..
For that magical moment
When day meets night
And the sun romances the moon.
Crimson amber in flirtatious streaks
Blush in anticipation, << Blushing in anticipation.
Dallying,
in Sweet persuasion
ever,
ever so slow.
Seducing the vast horizon
Her shrouded mantle spreads demurely,
Resisting his persistent display.
Acquiescing surrender,
In vain, a gentle truce is met-
“Madam, Till we meet again..”
Relinquishing the day.
Melting embers sink in,
Doused completely,
Dives deep, into the watery ravine. <
Peeking from her hooded cloak,
The moon smiles, boldly charmed.
Unrobed by flattery, strips in glittering delight,
and takes the night full reign.
With a sudden start,
I realized
I stayed up much too late
I’ve caught them At
their rendezvous, " en flagrante"
Worth all the wait!