05-30-2013, 01:22 AM
I liked the whimsy of this piece. The second stanza lost me. I wanted the rhyme scheme to follow the same beat in the third stanza. You brought new thoughts to wishes in wells 
(Today 01:52 PM)FayandFire Wrote:
Daydreams and Wishes
Sitting on a wishing well,
wish and wish I may.
My feet are getting soggy
and I’m running low on change.
Sitting on a wishing well,
something shines below.
It makes me want to dive right in,
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(Today 01:52 PM)FayandFire Wrote:
Daydreams and Wishes
Sitting on a wishing well,
wish and wish I may.
My feet are getting soggy
and I’m running low on change.
Sitting on a wishing well,
something shines below.
It makes me want to dive right in,
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