05-29-2013, 10:25 AM
Thank you everybody that has commented, it is greatly appreciated! I apologize both for my embarrassingly horrendous grammar and my failure to respond sooner.
Rose Love: The ore sound was a rhyme that I had intentionally put in place for the first stanza, but somehow carried over into the second. This poem, to me is a commentary on the repetative nature of war (how it returns every generation), and the 'ignorant' armies that fight in these wars.
Duel Nature: I appreciated your critiques (thanks alot), and have taken them into consideration. Glad you liked the poem!
Alchemist: Thanks for the feedback! I was considering adding a third stanza, and in a later revision it might be added. It wasn't intentionally based upon rhyme of the civil war but that doesnt really matter (although I know very little about this era).
Heslopian:The s' in the first line of the second stanza are on lighting and thunder primarily to mantain the rhyme with roar.
Once again, I would like to thank you all for taking time to read and help critique my poem! It is greatly appreciated!
Rose Love: The ore sound was a rhyme that I had intentionally put in place for the first stanza, but somehow carried over into the second. This poem, to me is a commentary on the repetative nature of war (how it returns every generation), and the 'ignorant' armies that fight in these wars.
Duel Nature: I appreciated your critiques (thanks alot), and have taken them into consideration. Glad you liked the poem!
Alchemist: Thanks for the feedback! I was considering adding a third stanza, and in a later revision it might be added. It wasn't intentionally based upon rhyme of the civil war but that doesnt really matter (although I know very little about this era).
Heslopian:The s' in the first line of the second stanza are on lighting and thunder primarily to mantain the rhyme with roar.
Once again, I would like to thank you all for taking time to read and help critique my poem! It is greatly appreciated!