05-29-2013, 04:09 AM
Bad Boys Club revision
Behind the anonymity of the Avatar
bad boys bicker.
They strap on silver spurs.
Never sleeping, crowing and clawing,
at this cockfight of egos.
Masks wear thin
as hints are dropped.
Who is Who and
Who said What?
Where is the Sage
who speaks few words,
yet shares His
Infinite Wisdom?
Thank You for the critique RainbowUnicornCake. I had not reworked this since I wrote it a few months ago. I liked your suggestions.
Behind the anonymity of the Avatar
bad boys bicker.
They strap on silver spurs.
Never sleeping, crowing and clawing,
at this cockfight of egos.
Masks wear thin
as hints are dropped.
Who is Who and
Who said What?
Where is the Sage
who speaks few words,
yet shares His
Infinite Wisdom?
Thank You for the critique RainbowUnicornCake. I had not reworked this since I wrote it a few months ago. I liked your suggestions.