05-29-2013, 03:46 AM
I love the first line, it really sets it up well. You have a good clue of the topic already by it and all that. I don't think the third line sounds right though, mainly the 'judgements about' part. I love the alliteration in the second line.
Really, the whole poem is good. I don't think you need so many line breaks, and I'm not sure about the last line as it doesn't fit in when I read it. Otherwise, I love it
Really, the whole poem is good. I don't think you need so many line breaks, and I'm not sure about the last line as it doesn't fit in when I read it. Otherwise, I love it
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)