Towards

[Cortical]

All this time I've walked
Alone
Towards endings I have not known

Never free, never willing
Dying
I am only following

The call of something beautiful awoken
Fierce and strong
Loving it will leave me broken

All this time I'll walk
Towards endings
That have forever waited

This whole poem is too abstract. There is no punctuaion and grammar is important in poetry (I suck with the grammar myself). Words like alone especially as a whole line are just abstract and meaningless to a degree. We don't know who the narrator is and the poem is written in the first person. To be honest you simply don't have much here but a bunch of abstractions, these vague words that don't refer to anything visible don't communicate much. Don't get discouraged you can improve most people are not born great poets good poets study poetry and grow. Thanks for posting.

Appreciate the input! Personally I like abstract writing and what I tried to achieve with this poem was to paint a view about the inevitability of life and unfulfilled dreams, the reader can fill in the blanks, the point as I see it with these kind of poems is 'merely' to evoke an emotional response.

It's difficult to write an abstract poem that doesn't sound vague pseudo poetry though and I apologize for my shortcomings there.