To War!
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(05-27-2013, 11:33 PM)Ajax Wrote:  The creaking shadows of dominions shore,
Move again! Like long lost lore.
The stirring death of your grandfathers war,
Will return! In multiples of gore.

The lightnings crack and thunders roar,
At war! Are we, we once more.
The brandishing knives and uniforms tore,
For country! Comes the ignorant corp.
Hi. Sorry, I fixated on this one thing--the repetition of the "ore" sound. It distracted me from the meaning of the words. Was it intentional to repeat it so much? If so, what is the significance of the sound in the poem?

The second thing which distracted me was the lack of apostrophes denoting possession.

Can I ask what the poem means to you? Well...I reckon I can ask lol. Ok, so I asked, hopefully it's not deemed inappropriate to ask...
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To War! - by Ajax - 05-27-2013, 11:33 PM
RE: To War! - by Rose Love - 05-28-2013, 12:30 AM
RE: To War! - by Alchemist - 05-28-2013, 10:46 PM
RE: To War! - by heslopian - 05-28-2013, 10:50 PM
RE: To War! - by Ajax - 05-29-2013, 10:25 AM



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