no drama (edit based upon tec and billy)

[Brownlie]

Smallish edit plus new last stanza:
Gotta go with Tec and say that I think I missed the point of the poem. This could mean I am a poor reader or the poem could benefit in becoming more clear


The French was lovely.
Coming up next
in the theatre of lusting hearts: - I would describe lusting hearts in an action.
You rock now!
Show no inhibitions
and no underwear!

My Lady Applebright: -you are -Your lady what century is this?right for my heart,
so: no drama, please,
as we approach perfection.

I feel so sublime
when I'm fading away
into other nirvanas.
Please, chase my uneasy
right out through the door.

Can you do that,
can you love me
while I am dead?
Born under a bad sign,
under a cheesecake moon. -cheesecake moon?

When I was born
heaven made a mistake,
and it is hard times sometimes
to refuse the remedy.

The clowneries of love affairs aside,
when summer bumps into me,
my goodbye address will read:
the French, it wasn't bad.

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Original:


The French was lovely.
Coming up next
in the theatre of lusting hearts,
and now You rock,
show no inhibitions
and no underwear,

My Lady Applebright: you are
right for my heart[
so: no drama please
as we approach perfection.

I feel so sublime
now in my prime
fading away
into other nothingnesses.
Please, chase my uneasy
right out through the door.

Can you do that,
can you love me
while I am dead?
Born under a bad sign,
under a cheesecake moon,

When I was born
heaven made a mistake,
and it is hard times
to remedy that not.
Let me repeat for you just this:

the French was not bad.

Again I agree with tec that there is a potentially deep insight that the poem didn't convey to me. Good post.