05-25-2013, 09:25 AM
hi aj. this needs a few more reads, a lot more reads in fact. it takes me back to the miners strikes. (i'm an anti thatcherite by calling 
) i like how you make her godlike with a capped H a good rant that many liberals would hate 
Downing beer and sandwiches like tools.
sticks out as a stronger image than most would think. more often as not, a lot of the union decisions were made in the local pubs at lunch time or as stated, during the work shift. i think changing it bar a piece of punctuation; which is beyond my ken, would take too much away from it. on that basis i'll leave my crit as it stands and come back for a few more reads.
thank for posting it.
) i like how you make her godlike with a capped H a good rant that many liberals would hate Downing beer and sandwiches like tools.
sticks out as a stronger image than most would think. more often as not, a lot of the union decisions were made in the local pubs at lunch time or as stated, during the work shift. i think changing it bar a piece of punctuation; which is beyond my ken, would take too much away from it. on that basis i'll leave my crit as it stands and come back for a few more reads.
thank for posting it.