05-25-2013, 08:29 AM
Hi Billy,
Submarine eyes served two purposes. One was solely just to tell her eye color, deep blue, and then there's the poetic meaning. It was to show her sadness, which is later then told about how she deals with it. The first stanza was mainly about personality traits of her, cause you know, I talk about her for awhile so I'd like the reader to know about her. Like for instance, the majority of it was telling about how everyone she meets is first on "Honey-moon phase." So pretty much she's the kind of person who loves everybody, but that can quickly change, and very soon. The other part is that between her outer appearance of always seeming to be happy, which comes from her loving everybody, she struggled and made sure that there's an unbreakable vow that she's never going to let anything get to her and always be on constant cloud nines (just a rewording of that cliché so that the message would be easier).
"Dancing through cheetah lights" - This is when it goes to me, this was my way of saying green light. It was meant to show my attitude towards crossing streets, which is then showing my attitude on life. Little care for it, If I die, I die, thats it, (which is the next line). Thanks for spotting the forced rhyme I couldn't really think of something that would ryhme more naturally there. Waterfront grin. my waterfront grin, is her, because when looking in the water you see your reflection, but its not exactly the same (like position wise). So the point was I saw myself in her, put there was still something different. "Denote of the Sickle Soar" this is explained in the 4th stanza, but I'll explain it here, the sickle was her tongue, and the soar came from all that it closely encountered, the point of the "denote of the sickle soar" Was the meaning of the after affects of being close to her.
Hope this helped, and if you still want to continue reading and ask questions, I'm not really going anywhere, wait I am, darn it, well I'll be back soon.
Submarine eyes served two purposes. One was solely just to tell her eye color, deep blue, and then there's the poetic meaning. It was to show her sadness, which is later then told about how she deals with it. The first stanza was mainly about personality traits of her, cause you know, I talk about her for awhile so I'd like the reader to know about her. Like for instance, the majority of it was telling about how everyone she meets is first on "Honey-moon phase." So pretty much she's the kind of person who loves everybody, but that can quickly change, and very soon. The other part is that between her outer appearance of always seeming to be happy, which comes from her loving everybody, she struggled and made sure that there's an unbreakable vow that she's never going to let anything get to her and always be on constant cloud nines (just a rewording of that cliché so that the message would be easier).
"Dancing through cheetah lights" - This is when it goes to me, this was my way of saying green light. It was meant to show my attitude towards crossing streets, which is then showing my attitude on life. Little care for it, If I die, I die, thats it, (which is the next line). Thanks for spotting the forced rhyme I couldn't really think of something that would ryhme more naturally there. Waterfront grin. my waterfront grin, is her, because when looking in the water you see your reflection, but its not exactly the same (like position wise). So the point was I saw myself in her, put there was still something different. "Denote of the Sickle Soar" this is explained in the 4th stanza, but I'll explain it here, the sickle was her tongue, and the soar came from all that it closely encountered, the point of the "denote of the sickle soar" Was the meaning of the after affects of being close to her.
Hope this helped, and if you still want to continue reading and ask questions, I'm not really going anywhere, wait I am, darn it, well I'll be back soon.