< that damn yellow flower >
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if instead of an article you used something with a personal pronoun it would be obvious, but probably too obvious. "to the left of our picnic bench in your yard . . ."

still, nice overall.
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< that damn yellow flower > - by rayheinrich - 05-22-2013, 02:01 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by cidermaid - 05-22-2013, 04:43 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by rayheinrich - 05-24-2013, 03:38 AM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by billy - 05-22-2013, 04:51 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by Brownlie - 05-23-2013, 01:58 AM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by milo - 05-24-2013, 08:01 AM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by rayheinrich - 05-24-2013, 03:03 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by milo - 05-24-2013, 03:56 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by billy - 05-24-2013, 04:17 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by milo - 05-24-2013, 04:58 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by rayheinrich - 05-24-2013, 05:59 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by billy - 05-24-2013, 06:09 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by cidermaid - 05-24-2013, 07:09 PM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by milo - 06-04-2013, 07:43 AM
RE: < that damn yellow flower > - by billy - 06-09-2013, 07:58 AM



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