05-23-2013, 07:00 PM
Hi Matthew,
While your poem contains sweet thoughts, it 's unlikely to be of much interest to others outside the two that it refers to. Love, flowers and clouds go nicely together, but these themes/analogies have been used many times before. Whe writing poetry try to think of the reader's experience, and to show in unique (though not abstract) ways your ideas. Unfortunely, here there is not enough of that, not enough substance for the reader, but certainly for a romantic partner.
While your poem contains sweet thoughts, it 's unlikely to be of much interest to others outside the two that it refers to. Love, flowers and clouds go nicely together, but these themes/analogies have been used many times before. Whe writing poetry try to think of the reader's experience, and to show in unique (though not abstract) ways your ideas. Unfortunely, here there is not enough of that, not enough substance for the reader, but certainly for a romantic partner.