05-23-2013, 10:25 AM
Yeah man,
I like it much better, it feels more right. Now that I've read them both the end of the second one, does feel like it wasn't part of the rest of the poem, you can almost tell that it was edited.
That last line has got humour in it also and it works, much better.
I'm glad I've seen that now.
Don't worry about people thinking you might be crazy there is plenty of crazy people on here.
Thanks for the read.
AR
I like it much better, it feels more right. Now that I've read them both the end of the second one, does feel like it wasn't part of the rest of the poem, you can almost tell that it was edited.
That last line has got humour in it also and it works, much better.
I'm glad I've seen that now.
Don't worry about people thinking you might be crazy there is plenty of crazy people on here.
Thanks for the read.
AR
wae aye man ye radgie