05-22-2013, 04:43 PM
Hi Ray (second time lucky I typed out a response and got bounced out of the site..so if this message pops up twice this will be why)
I always look forward to you submissions in the fun section. I love the pictures you post and 9 x out of 10 times I enjoy reading your poems. (Perhaps i have been guilty of not posting my comments of encouragment enough - I do really enjoy reading your posts and always look out for them).
Sadly however I did not get much from this one, so either i am missing something (which is possible i have more than my fair share of blond moments
) )..or the poem needs to give me a little more.
I got a sense of a play on she loves me / she loves me not, from the flower there or not there, but I've stuggled to place the oak tree / yard thing that is in there - it just feels like a filler. As such it is fine as I like the absent minded musing feel it has, but then again it is irritating as it does not give me anything beyond this and in such a short poem I am wanting every word to count for something.
JMO will wait and see if I can see anything further to enlighten me from other people's views on this.
Thanks for the read and the picture. (Love pics of the little and overlooked things in life). AJ.
I always look forward to you submissions in the fun section. I love the pictures you post and 9 x out of 10 times I enjoy reading your poems. (Perhaps i have been guilty of not posting my comments of encouragment enough - I do really enjoy reading your posts and always look out for them).
Sadly however I did not get much from this one, so either i am missing something (which is possible i have more than my fair share of blond moments
) )..or the poem needs to give me a little more.I got a sense of a play on she loves me / she loves me not, from the flower there or not there, but I've stuggled to place the oak tree / yard thing that is in there - it just feels like a filler. As such it is fine as I like the absent minded musing feel it has, but then again it is irritating as it does not give me anything beyond this and in such a short poem I am wanting every word to count for something.
JMO will wait and see if I can see anything further to enlighten me from other people's views on this.
Thanks for the read and the picture. (Love pics of the little and overlooked things in life). AJ.