05-21-2013, 01:21 PM
Is this supposed to be religion neutral? Cuz it isn't. And you shouldn't use words that you don't know all the meanings for. You mention sod. Do you seriously not know the slang usage of the word? Do you see anyone write a poem about faggots? No, because that would sound like this:
In the forest, two hunters found,
A pig's carcass infested with maggots,
They squealed with glee, and hugged each other,
Because they both loved faggots.
And then at the end we get 'His' 'You' 'Your'. As if this one being made the universe. Not all religions have one God. And not all of them refer to their God with a capitalized pronoun. So this poem ends in mild bigotry.
On an other note:
And who will end injustice,
and who will banish war?
And who will offer solace to
the outcast and the poor?
war/poor not really rhyming..
In the forest, two hunters found,
A pig's carcass infested with maggots,
They squealed with glee, and hugged each other,
Because they both loved faggots.
And then at the end we get 'His' 'You' 'Your'. As if this one being made the universe. Not all religions have one God. And not all of them refer to their God with a capitalized pronoun. So this poem ends in mild bigotry.
On an other note:
And who will end injustice,
and who will banish war?
And who will offer solace to
the outcast and the poor?
war/poor not really rhyming..