05-21-2013, 11:19 AM
(05-21-2013, 11:16 AM)brianbui1337 Wrote: The poem is a clear, concise story that keeps me intrigued until the end, where I was slightly confused. Was it meant to be comical?Yes, my original was very dark with a not so pleasant ending... It wasn't meant to be comical at first but I don't necsecarrly like people seeing the dark side of my thoughts so I kind of wanted to flip it at the end to make it not so heavy.
(05-21-2013, 11:16 AM)brianbui1337 Wrote: The poem is a clear, concise story that keeps me intrigued until the end, where I was slightly confused. Was it meant to be comical?Thanks for the input and you questioning if it was meant to be comical makes me think it's only a funny twist to me.... I wanted to pull people in with dark imagery and surprise them at the end.. But I guess that didn't happen. Thanks again