Botanica

[tectak]

Botanica

Oh, for a garden like the one
that lately graced our urban street;
where florabunda bloomed profusefloribunda,surely?
and finch and magpie chanced to meet.

Where citrus hung in golden globes
to cushion winter’s creeping chill, not sure about the cushion word. How cushion? Difficult! ....to hold off winter'screeping chill?
and pansies beds assured the world avoid the problem! and pansy beds assured the world. Not worth the word play otherwise
that spring would keep her promise still. Nice sentiment. Overwintering into spring. Good

It’s said the man who owned it waned
from grieving for his lifelong mate;
and in his potting shed arranged
with rope his life to terminate. I like inversions but this is a little too forced to fit. Yoda speak it also is for sure.

They’re ripping up the garden now
to build a clutch of smart abodes
for business folk who can’t afford
to waste their time in useless modes. ...and here also. Very forced and blatant rhyme. You are better than this.

So last weekend a neighbour brought
me floral tributes from the mall:
that panorama at the sink
and Monet’s garden in the hall. dissappointing end. Not too sure why so precipitous. Not sure of anything in this stanza. You know...tell me

Hi pilgrim,
Nice story which needs smoothing out. There is inconsistency between stanzas which makes me think you wrote this over a lengthy period. Well worth editing.
Best,
tectak