Jesus and his quest for glory.

[billy]

a consistent meter would help it read smoother. look at the meter of the 1st or 2nd verse and make the other verses read the same (metrically speaking). try not to use to end rhymes that are the same. am i to take jesus in the title as god because in the poem it feels as though he's separated in some way.

When I was a kid
I was told about God,
A horrible spiteful
Vengeful sod.

Destroying unbelievers
He'd tear them limb from limb
Smiting all those people
With another god than Him.

It's the same old God
For Muslims and Jews
Except one can't have bacon
The other no booze. i like this verse it' feels honest

And just so we'd know
That God is the boss
He had His own Son
Nailed to a cross.

Ever since then
Those who follow the Son
Have taught the world love
Through the barrel of a gun. feels jerky, not enough stressed syllables

They taught the world guilt
And taught the world shame
Of sexual desire
But not oppression and pain.

I can't tell you what to believe
I wouldn't know where to start
Apart from this
Just be kind to others,
And follow your heart.