I'm a Duck With Alligator Fingers

[James]

Hi James, thanks for sharing your poem. I can sense that this poem came from a happy place. While it has an upbeat, whimsical nature though, it has abstractions galore that are imho hard to tie together and to understand. Who the narrator (N) is and what the N is talking about is beyond my grasp after reading through the poem a few times in earnest. It's not that I don't appreciate the creativity that went into this poem, because I can tell you took time with writing it until it was just so, it's that the lines don't relate enough with each other, and ultimately to the reader. There's a sense of fantasy yes, but the story/metaphor/experience is unclear.

Also, it's not necessary to capitalize the first letter of each sentence. Your writing will be helped along by using punctuation as you usually would. Keep writing.

I'd hope it does, I wanted it too at least, to show while it is happy, there's still "something about it" if you catch my drift. And thanks for telling me about the capitalisation, I thought I always had to do that. Thank you for taking to the time to read, I'll be sure to bring more poems here.