05-18-2013, 03:26 PM
Hi Obloquy,
I just had to comment on this poem. First of all, excellent choice of subject matter and the way that you have opened the poem with those delicate descriptions of the ambient sounds within music is very beautiful. I would also hazard a guess that you are a musician. Your other descriptions are also very beautiful but the first stanza is really exquisite.
Also I would reiterate what AJ has said for I too felt slightly let down by the ending, but in some ways that is a testament to how beautiful the rest of your poem is. I won't say too much about it, but I also feel that it has a wonderful opportunity to end in an equally beautiful sentiment as portrayed by the rest of the poem. I've never met a person with a so called "disability" who hasn't used it to become far greater in many respects.
Thanks for the read I really enjoyed it.
AR
I just had to comment on this poem. First of all, excellent choice of subject matter and the way that you have opened the poem with those delicate descriptions of the ambient sounds within music is very beautiful. I would also hazard a guess that you are a musician. Your other descriptions are also very beautiful but the first stanza is really exquisite.
Also I would reiterate what AJ has said for I too felt slightly let down by the ending, but in some ways that is a testament to how beautiful the rest of your poem is. I won't say too much about it, but I also feel that it has a wonderful opportunity to end in an equally beautiful sentiment as portrayed by the rest of the poem. I've never met a person with a so called "disability" who hasn't used it to become far greater in many respects.
Thanks for the read I really enjoyed it.
AR
wae aye man ye radgie