Absent hearted

[Being human]

Solitude has never hurt so much before
I’ve come to love you more and more

Though still simple, those two lines work better like that. All the lines could use that sort of smoothing out.


I was lonely many times but never alone

Things start to get more complicated with the line above. About being alone with her, or is it something else you mean?

Maybe if you get to a computer, you can try to smooth things out a little more.

Well thank you for your feedback, really appreciate it, first time so sort of nervous and excited at the same time.

Coming back to the point, well m not sure what you mean by "smoothing out", As in the rhyme or the sentences as a whole?

The intent was to convey that though I like solitude and seclusion and loneliness has never caused me any pain but it is only the separation from her makes me feel alone [trying to depict the difference between lonely And alone through it]

I'd be very grateful to you if you point out more specific things and help out a rookie with your vast experience, anyways this was pretty helpful too, thanks again