can i have feedback on this poem, it's about the vietnam war for school
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Now is the only moment I’ve had to myself all day
And I use it to write to you


I can’t remember how long I’ve been here
Or how far I’ve walked in these boots since yesterday



But I do remember the smell of my mother’s cooking
And the smell of your favorite perfume you always wore


I remember when you told me you loved me
And I will always remember the way your eyes changed when I said it back








I’m not sure why we’re all here
Or who’s an enemy and who’s just another brother

But what I do know is that it’s 1 am here
And I’m not even sure where here is





But I do love you
And through all of the hate I’ve seen
That has never rang truer


(s.a.)
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can i have feedback on this poem, it's about the vietnam war for school - by sammmadam - 05-16-2013, 09:18 AM



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