Ghost in the Machine Part 2- The Silver Jungle

[James]

Hey. I like a lot of this, the images mostly. Some doesn't really fit and make sense though. fields of orchids? well, no wonder you don't see them, I don't think orchids really grow in fields. Also, I think the moon yearning and longing is a bit cheesy. Other than that, it all is pretty nice.


Thanks.

-H

The importance of that line wasn't really whether they grow on fields or not, it is what the essence of what it is, it sort of ties in to the grander scheme. But thank you for telling me that it was cheesy, I guess I could change that up a bit, I did write this pretty late at night. If some didn't really make sense or fit then it probably won't if you didn't read part 1, assuming you didn't, if you did than I'd appreciate it if you elaborated on that if you could.
Edit- Okay never mind I see you did, but did you see the edit? Because I continued on with the story in it, there was a second stanza

Thanks for the comment
-James