Seductress

[Brownlie]

Seductress
Deadly the seductress
clothed in white.
Blood’s underneath snow.
She is hell. -- hell is a vague word

Fangs beneath sweet lips: --- maybe be mroe specific than fangs
such a sight.
Sickness within this flesh --- Sickness? what kind of sickness
where she dwells.

I break from her beauty.
Mind now pure
I my great protector. ---still seems vague
shields my eyes.

Death of the pale temptress.
Broken lure.
I embrace my soul with
sin denied.

I think this poem would benefit from more detail. The idea of a temptress is general and not necessarily presenting readers with something new.