05-15-2013, 03:06 AM
I remember studying a poem a while ago, called Assynt Mountains. Perhaps it would give you some inspiration for some great imagery while keeping it short and sweet:
the row of crones
rugs on knees
watch the coalfire dawn
Canisp, nearest the blaze, grins
the sun rises
between blackened stumps
in ancient Lewisian gums
23 words but still gets a lot across, in my opinion. Otherwise, I like the lines you've got :-)
the row of crones
rugs on knees
watch the coalfire dawn
Canisp, nearest the blaze, grins
the sun rises
between blackened stumps
in ancient Lewisian gums
23 words but still gets a lot across, in my opinion. Otherwise, I like the lines you've got :-)
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)