05-14-2013, 01:56 PM
Hello. This is my first post and my first attempt into poetry. Bare in mind that english is not my mother tongue. You might find some grammatical errors that I would love if you point them out. If some things make no sense, I'm sorry. I really tried my best. I hope that you can help me improve.
One More Time
Tears run down my face,
As my life drips from me.
This fate that I can't embrace,
Is the only thing I see.
Your beautiful eyes my Northern Star,
Are not here to shed some light.
All is darkness, nothing bright,
My heart, a maze of scars.
You still Love me and so do I,
there is still much for us to fight.
You are my girl and I'm your guy,
You my moon to brighten my night.
You know it ain't a wild guess,
that we can be a success.
Give me a chance to make it right
I will make your Love ignite.
One more chance is all I need,
You and I will succeed.
I'll Love you 'till the end of time,
please my Love, please be mine.
One more time.
Thank you for your time. I hope you liked it and that you can set me towards proper path in this subject.
Tomi De Lucca
One More Time
Tears run down my face,
As my life drips from me.
This fate that I can't embrace,
Is the only thing I see.
Your beautiful eyes my Northern Star,
Are not here to shed some light.
All is darkness, nothing bright,
My heart, a maze of scars.
You still Love me and so do I,
there is still much for us to fight.
You are my girl and I'm your guy,
You my moon to brighten my night.
You know it ain't a wild guess,
that we can be a success.
Give me a chance to make it right
I will make your Love ignite.
One more chance is all I need,
You and I will succeed.
I'll Love you 'till the end of time,
please my Love, please be mine.
One more time.
Thank you for your time. I hope you liked it and that you can set me towards proper path in this subject.
Tomi De Lucca