(1st edit) stars, moon, sun

[Magpie]

Some great editing going on. Think these are much sharper and crisp both to read and in meaning.
AJ

Like cidermaid and billy, I also think you have done an excellent job, it really sharpens the images. Love the 'concrete jungle'. When used in this poem, I think it combines the nature and the man-made, in a way that fits the poem very well. Hope that made sense, my English is really letting me down today
Best,
LB

Hi AJ and Volaticus,
Thanks for the kind comments on these new versions but most of all thanks for the input that helped to lead to these better versions.
Much appreciated.
AR