Death and Spring

[heslopian]

Death and Spring

Wherever a flower blooms
A motionless dead body looms Looms where, and to whom? I'm willing to accept this metaphor (I like the linking of nature and death) but you need to explain it.

A body a bulb to cast a dim light Would a body cast any light at all, even dim? A dying man might cast a dim light, but this metaphor doesn't make sense to me.
Perhaps a soul took flight The rhyme of "light" and "flight" strikes me as really corny.

Of life to move there was a dearth Whose life, move to where, and are you using "life" as interchangeable with "space"?
Succor from within the earth Good line, though I don't get its context.

Corporeal corpses feed the animated bodies
This is the process of rotting I like this couplet just because it's concise and shocking, though again, I don't know what its context is, especially as you've now moved from motionless bodies to zombies.

To sprout pale petals What's sprouting petals, the corpses?
Moved by ghastly pedals of rigid treadles Are the "treadles" a metaphor for nature's invisible mechanisms, which in spring make plants and flowers grow?

Pellucid tears of the bereaved filled with sobs and heaves
Mourning Is this a pun on "morning"? If so, I've seen other writers use it and I must admit that it strikes me as juvenile. dew magnify "magnifies" the hue upon the verdant leaves "The hue upon the verdant leaves" is a good turn of phrase.

On these trees did humans impart life Maybe I'm being pedantic, but can you impart life to a tree?
Through their turmoil and their strife "Life" and "strife" is another corny rhyme which makes me wince, probably because I've used it so many times myself

As the dew the tear magnifies light "The tear magnifies light" is another good turn of phrase.
But tears prove some are torn from life

And the bereaved can bear the weight of soil Good line, though why do those living ("the bereaved") need to "bear the weight of soil"? Isn't that the corpse's problem?
The dawning dirty burden of earthly toil I'm assuming that "weight of soil" is a metaphor for "earthly toil", though it's a weak connection at best, unless you're talking about farmers, I suppose.

Not Part of the Poem:
Unfortunately Rothke beat me to the bunch using the pun of bulb as a light and a part of a plant, I would be much obliged to hear any reactions to this poem.

You have some good lines here, but they're divorced from any coherent context or narrative. Most, if not all of the time I simply didn't know what you were going on about, though I grasped a basic contrast between spring and human death which you tried to convey in a poignant manner. You need to work on what your lines mean literally before delving too deeply into metaphor and simile, I think. JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read