could be

[Brownlie]

Ok, this is about a lover who is away at war? I'm just taking a shot in the dark after a curosry reading of your piece.

I am obsessing a love
that thrives on war.
As a sentence the first couplet is awkward.

I’ve abandoned the joy of
clustered Rhododendrons;
their beauty bores me.-- Mentioning being bored with beauty is offputting, but that could be a personal reaction to be taken with a grain of salt.
Why use these line breaks?

I am weaving through heaven
without a tether.
Tangled on a string of stars,
losing our connection. You are so far -

A thousand miles of oceans lie
below this abyss of could be.---Abyss of could be? Maybe Abyss of what could be? I don't know.