(1st edit) stars, moon, sun

[billy]

much better. , have a think about 'the' in the last line.

Clear night sky
I lose myself wandering
between the stars.

excellent (is 'till' needed) this is an out and out haiku, and a good one

From behind clouds
a star grew brighter till
it became the Moon.

i like the modern feel of this, glowing could be the seasonal word which would make this a haiku

Concrete jungle...
breathing, majestic, alive,
glowing at sunset.

some really good edits. much tighter and because of it much sharper images.

original

In the clear night sky
I got lost whilst wandering
between the stars.

A star that appeared
from behind clouds; grew brighter
and became the Moon.

Even the city...
breathing, majestic, alive,
glowing at sunset.