(1st edit) stars, moon, sun

[Heartafire]

In the clear night sky
I got lost whilst wandering
between the stars.

A star that appeared
from behind clouds; grew brighter
and became the Moon.

Even the city...
breathing, majestic, alive,
glowing at sunset.

These are beautiful. I really don't care for "whilst", I would drop that
though I see you are staying in the syllable count on the first one.

#2 I might say:
a star appeared
from behind clouds
became the moon.

All in all, very lovely! fine exotics.