(1st edit) stars, moon, sun
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Clear night sky
I lose myself wandering
between the stars.

From behind clouds
a star grew brighter till
it became the Moon.

Concrete jungle...
breathing, majestic, alive,
glowing at sunset.


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In the clear night sky
I got lost whilst wandering
between the stars.

A star that appeared
from behind clouds; grew brighter
and became the Moon.

Even the city...
breathing, majestic, alive,
glowing at sunset.
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(1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by Magpie - 05-11-2013, 10:18 AM
RE: stars, moon, sun - by cidermaid - 05-12-2013, 03:57 AM
RE: stars, moon, sun - by Magpie - 05-12-2013, 08:16 AM
RE: stars, moon, sun - by Heartafire - 05-12-2013, 04:38 AM
RE: stars, moon, sun - by Volaticus - 05-12-2013, 08:52 AM
RE: stars, moon, sun - by Magpie - 05-12-2013, 10:22 AM
RE: (1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by Magpie - 05-12-2013, 07:23 PM
RE: (1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by billy - 05-12-2013, 07:51 PM
RE: (1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by Magpie - 05-12-2013, 08:31 PM
RE: (1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by cidermaid - 05-12-2013, 09:02 PM
RE: (1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by Volaticus - 05-13-2013, 02:34 AM
RE: (1st edit) stars, moon, sun - by Magpie - 05-13-2013, 09:54 AM



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