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I suck at poetry

foxpaws
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05-09-2013, 02:08 PM

retched --> wretched

The last sentence fragment seems odd at the end of full sentences. I'd suggest, "A wretched stench fills my nostrils as I consumed excreted words, willing my body to reprocess them into a purer pile of shit."

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I suck at poetry - by Ehud - 05-09-2013, 12:42 PM

RE: I suck at poetry - by foxpaws - 05-09-2013, 02:08 PM

RE: I suck at poetry - by syntheticsunset - 05-09-2013, 02:17 PM

RE: I suck at poetry - by newsclippings - 05-09-2013, 03:00 PM

RE: I suck at poetry - by billy - 05-09-2013, 03:08 PM

RE: I suck at poetry - by Brownlie - 05-10-2013, 12:14 PM

RE: I suck at poetry - by Ferwynne - 05-10-2013, 02:12 PM

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