The Path I Could Have Walked
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Every time I read it without the first stanza, it feels so headless to me.
And the bricks of gold is supposed to represent the fact that the road leads to what I want. Like in Oz, you know?

Thanks for the critique, I'll keep it in mind when I write again Smile
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The Path I Could Have Walked - by Zerric - 05-07-2013, 11:11 AM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by Todd - 05-07-2013, 11:33 AM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by Sam33lynn - 05-08-2013, 09:44 AM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by Zerric - 05-08-2013, 11:52 AM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by billy - 05-08-2013, 07:44 PM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by YaMarVa - 05-09-2013, 12:27 AM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by Zerric - 05-09-2013, 12:08 PM
RE: The Path I Could Have Walked - by billy - 05-09-2013, 12:28 PM



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