05-08-2013, 11:11 PM
You have something good to work with here. It needs some trimming and editing (grammar/syntax) but It is promising. Here:
Her hands hide her from the whole world and as they slide down so does her face and cheeks and tears; she is an animal now, murmuring a noise ,
though I feel this runs on, imo, it is gold.
Heart
Her hands hide her from the whole world and as they slide down so does her face and cheeks and tears; she is an animal now, murmuring a noise ,
though I feel this runs on, imo, it is gold.
Heart