Holding Back

[Volaticus]

sometimes i feel like
pebbles in a swift river, I like the image
like i'm Maybe drop this line? 'like i'm' (to me anyways) sounds redundant.
being worn down by Maybe drop the word 'being'?
the cruel currents. 'cruel' seemed to me a bit weak choice in this line

sometimes i feel like
spring comes too soon, Maybe it would connect better to 'torrent' a few lines down, if you wrote 'fast', 'hastily' etc. instead of 'soon'?
like it Maybe drop this line?
always comes in a torrent. Maybe add 'it' to the start of this line instead?

i feel like Maybe drop this line?
i need a dam, need to hold
back the onslaught. Seemed a bit vague (other than it being a reference to water). Onslaught of what?

like i'm going to get caught Maybe drop 'like'?
up, rushed downstream.

my pieces scattered;
my bedrock,
gone. I enjoyed these last two lines

Sorry if this was too much, but I think there's good potential in this poem, so I guess I got a little carried away. I like the ideas of the metaphors/images. My notes are of course JMHO, to do with what you want. Is there a reason that you didn't capitalize anything? Thanks for the read