Eve was the Snake

[fourtimefelon]

Thanks for the feedback, I was definitely working to a beat in my head, and if I were to speak this to someone its definitely more of a rap I suppose. As far as the last line, thepoetcreatrix, I actually wrote that down on a piece of paper after some stuff happened, and the rest of it came out backwards. And I do realize that fish on a hook and snake and lies and stuff are fairly cliche, but while stereotypes and cliches can be boring and definitely over used, I feel that they become cliche because they strike such a vibrant chord inside of the people who read and write or sing or hear the words. I mean, who hasn't felt like a worm on a hook BC of the way someone treats them? And if that's the point I'm trying to convey, I wonder why I should risk losing it in a metaphor that only I can decipher, ya know? Just thoughts. Thanks for all the input. Never shared any stuff before.