Seagulls....(edited)

[Magpie]

try and cut some of the baggage (excess) i suggested some i think there are others. i quite enjoyed the read and found it humorous. if fact too many good lines to point out 1 or 2. it skates round prose and makes it as a good poem some of the punctuation and needs a bit of work and i'm not sure the mid-sentence caps work

Why are seagulls still called seagulls?

Granted,

I'm sure there are still a few
Hardcore originals out there.
Balancing precariously on some
Small cliff face ledge with a sea view to live for.

But they are not the same seagulls that I speak of.
The city dwellers, the rooftop occupiers,
The "Your food is my food" seagulls.
These are the beasts that I speak of.

Arrogantly strutting their stuff down the high street,
Scattering happy go lucky window shoppers.
Surveying the potential for wayward scraps.
With a determined imperious swagger.

They've got evil eyes.
They unnerve me.
That sideways stare,
Obviously learnt from studying Picasso.
They know more than what they are letting on.

Ask the Crows. They know the reality.
Ferocious enemies, Crow and seagull.
Seen them fighting on many occasions.
Or rather,
Crow antagonises.
Seagull gives chase.
Crow flies into nearest tree.
Crow gloats.
Don't mess with the shape shifters,
It is a different level of comprehension.

The other day whilst meandering towards the forest,
I saw in the clear blue sky; aerial acrobatics.
Seagulls, four of them, swooping, rushing a Bird of Prey.
A Hawk, solitary, hunting in the same place as it always has.

It's all turvy topsy I tell you.
Forest... Eight miles from the sea.
Gulls harassing a Hawk.

The Hawk didn't flinch in the slightest.
Composed, a beautiful sight to.....
But back, back, back to point in question.

Gulls of the sea they are no longer! sea,
I'm not asking for a cull.
Just a reclassification.
A subspecies.

And you never know.
With an authentic identity,
A separate heritage.
They might just become more....

Peaceful.

Thanks Billy for the comments,
I am actually going to write this again, more so the ending, because realised yesterday more of the comedy aspect. But the end of this is not comedy at all, it kind of just fades but I did have a funny ending originally, and I must of thought it wasn't serious enough so I changed it. But this will get reposted with edit. And your suggestions make sense as regards the flow (excess baggage).
Many thanks.
AR

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The reason for the capitals on Crow, Hawk and Bird of Prey was to make seagulls inferior in the context of the poem, but perhaps it was a bit confusing.

That's a smart stylistic choice. If you plan to re-work this poem, don't ditch that just because I was too ignorant to get it

Hi Heslopian,
After thinking about it, I do intend to re work this, with a different more comedic ending. So thanks for all the pointers, I will bear these in mind when I edit. I never realised how funny the beginning was until you commented yesterday. Like the Picasso line, I was somewhat embarrassed by, but it does work.
Thanks once again.
And edit should be up soon, possibly today.
AR