05-06-2013, 03:34 PM
I liked the rhyming and free form writing here, great metaphor's as well. I believe you could definitely improve on some literary devices like rhyme schemes if you would like to further your rhyming more. I'm a rapper and i'm always writing songs with crazy scheme works embedded into it, multisyllabylic rhymes and flow. If you'd ever like to know more about that, feel free to send me a message! Also I enjoyed the topic, much can be said about it and it was really good. Have a good one and stay at it!