05-06-2013, 12:00 AM
I like the vivid imagery in this one. Here:
Today I observed a dog angry with the river.
In his eyes I saw fear,
incomprehensible rage,
I might drop today and forego observing anger, you mention the fear and rage in the next lines. I like the way you have ended this, I think that line is really the strongest.
Today I observed a dog angry with the river.
In his eyes I saw fear,
incomprehensible rage,
I might drop today and forego observing anger, you mention the fear and rage in the next lines. I like the way you have ended this, I think that line is really the strongest.