a pleaser

[heslopian]

Never could have said no,
Emotional reflex,
Ever a pleaser. Good punchy rhythm in this verse. Are the capitals at the beginning of each line needed?

Suspicious eyes,
For rapists are everywhere, "Rapists" pops up out of nowhere and comes as a real shock, given the lulling rhythm so far, which I'm not sure is a good thing. Maybe a less aggressive word, like "assailents", would fit in better?
I can't even refuse the cashier's
Sales of the day. I have trouble refusing them too, though as I'm po' white trash I have no choice

I have shrunken into a little ball.
Gravity and the kicking of children Woah woah woah, why is the narrator kicking children?
Have made my path, Is this comma needed?
Down the boulevard.

I found a way to make it
Less scary,
Discovered that if I gaze downward, Is this comma needed?
People just don’t notice.
So I became best friends with the ground. Great line. Funny, yet poignant.

I have shrunken into a little ball. Good use of repitition, though the repeating of the rest of S3 is less effective. Maybe the poem would be stronger if it ended on this line?
Gravity and the kicking of children
Have made my path,
Down the boulevard.

My critique is, of course, JMHO. This poem conveys the pain of crippling shyness with genuine power. Thanks for the read