05-04-2013, 03:37 PM
(05-04-2013, 03:31 PM)Brownlie Wrote: First I would like to thank you for reading what I posted. Next, I am immediately reminded of the petrarchan sonnet "Design" by Robert Frost, check it out if you have not already.Yours is a very lustful poem but I would ask you to think beyond your lust. Are there any downsides to this relationship? I'm glad you stuck with your image and maintained the metaphor. Many poets would advocate Carpe Diem or sieze the day. Why preserve your honor when life is so fleeting that sort of thing.... Keep writing and remember to read. Good Luck.With this poem, I was trying to portray a truly destructive relationship and how we are drawn in. Through my lust, he lays my trap. But the carpe diem is one I had not fully considered. I will think about how that could be incorporated. Oh, and I just read "Design". Lovely! I had not read that one, though I do like Robert Frost. Thank you for your reply!