05-02-2013, 02:39 AM
I might go for: on! a hangover afternoon. Fixing it right now,
cheers
Serge
" After midnight electricity had died and the town laid asleep and the cobble stones grew under my shoes. I waved a cab, showed my little hotel calling card to the cab driver and we chugged on over.
He to me, you are German, me to him yes, I am, he to me, oh fine, I need a job, me to him oh fine to know, he to me, I want to invite you to my house, me nodding."
Should I rather use Doppelpunkte (colons) here? I think: yes.
to Tom once more:
"This is gold, serge. "
I know, you did not intend it, but now I have a heavy problem: Because now I want the whole poem in gold.
;-)
cheers
the gurk
re: shortening this line:
"Invited to the luna park by a group of young people I met at a tea garden,"
"a group of young people I met at a tea garden" cab be rephrased thusly:
Invitd to the luna park by my new tea garden friends.
An aside note: because of the Tea Garden ( Turkish: çay-hane): It is very much like the greek Agora: the place you hang out, meet friends and make lovers.
cheers
Serge
" After midnight electricity had died and the town laid asleep and the cobble stones grew under my shoes. I waved a cab, showed my little hotel calling card to the cab driver and we chugged on over.
He to me, you are German, me to him yes, I am, he to me, oh fine, I need a job, me to him oh fine to know, he to me, I want to invite you to my house, me nodding."
Should I rather use Doppelpunkte (colons) here? I think: yes.
to Tom once more:
"This is gold, serge. "
I know, you did not intend it, but now I have a heavy problem: Because now I want the whole poem in gold.
;-)
cheers
the gurk
re: shortening this line:
"Invited to the luna park by a group of young people I met at a tea garden,"
"a group of young people I met at a tea garden" cab be rephrased thusly:
Invitd to the luna park by my new tea garden friends.
An aside note: because of the Tea Garden ( Turkish: çay-hane): It is very much like the greek Agora: the place you hang out, meet friends and make lovers.