coughing up blood in the morning

[lewis taylor]

Thank you very much tectak. You know, when I pasted this piece into the thread text box I took a hard look at the "intro" and thought a similar thing, however I figured I'd keep it in there and see what people think, so cheers for the input. Do you think it could work at the end of the poem in stead? Just a thought. I'll see if there's anything I can do with the last line. Thanks again,
Lewis