04-30-2013, 02:02 AM
A very positive life affirming poem, I can't help but agree with the sentiments expressed.
Perhaps it could of been broken up into a couple of extra sentences, especially the first sentence which is extremely long. Probably best not to use the adjective "perennial" twice.
Also trees waving their "slumber" arms is a nice description, but in a poem of so much positivity it doesn't quite seem to fit. The same for "tired memories". Not that slumber and tired are negative words, as such, but less exuberant than the "life and vigour" mentioned earlier in the poem. And you are right.... life is beautiful.
Perhaps it could of been broken up into a couple of extra sentences, especially the first sentence which is extremely long. Probably best not to use the adjective "perennial" twice.
Also trees waving their "slumber" arms is a nice description, but in a poem of so much positivity it doesn't quite seem to fit. The same for "tired memories". Not that slumber and tired are negative words, as such, but less exuberant than the "life and vigour" mentioned earlier in the poem. And you are right.... life is beautiful.
wae aye man ye radgie