04-29-2013, 03:44 AM
He speaks insipid innuendo,
Insisting in monotonous dulcet tones.
If "dropping hints" were to be a sport,
He would undeniably be undisputed champion.
Understanding this, I offer in my defence,
To be a "Zen Buddhist" teacher to him; of sorts.
At this line, the capital letter at the beginning might hurt the flow. Depending on who's reading it. And that can be said of the other lines too, but this one especially, because of how it's worded.
So when he think me to be, laughably lazy,
Should it be thinks?
Languid protagonist of promises broken.
And the period here makes you stumble a little. But just a little.
Patience, is the gift that I am offering.
Insisting in monotonous dulcet tones.
If "dropping hints" were to be a sport,
He would undeniably be undisputed champion.
Understanding this, I offer in my defence,
To be a "Zen Buddhist" teacher to him; of sorts.
At this line, the capital letter at the beginning might hurt the flow. Depending on who's reading it. And that can be said of the other lines too, but this one especially, because of how it's worded.
So when he think me to be, laughably lazy,
Should it be thinks?
Languid protagonist of promises broken.
And the period here makes you stumble a little. But just a little.
Patience, is the gift that I am offering.