My first love
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This is a difficult subject to write about and considering that the poem is so personal to you I won't say too much apart from, use of metaphors would greatly improve this poem and add a bit colour and spice. Also the use of the word "silly" just doesn't seem right.
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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My first love - by religare231 - 04-29-2013, 02:20 AM
RE: My first love - by rowens - 04-29-2013, 02:34 AM
RE: My first love - by Magpie - 04-29-2013, 03:12 AM
RE: My first love - by Volaticus - 04-29-2013, 07:44 AM
RE: My first love - by vtsai01 - 04-29-2013, 07:49 AM



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